Superior Girl: Crystal - Chapter 2
Hey all,
Today I uploaded the second chapter to Superior Girl: Crystal. Following on from the first chapter I released two weeks ago, this second chapter sees Superior Girl smash into the house where the bad guy is holding the girl hostage. You’ll see Superior Girl all cocky as she swaggers into the room and takes a few bullets on the chest where - of course - they deflect harmlessly away.
But things aren’t going to be as easy she she first as the bad guy has a nasty trick up his sleeve!!
Enjoy!
Jon
January 29th, 2007 at 9:46 am
Curious turn on the story for next week but there’s a mistake:
At end of page 6 last phrase is from another history, the Zora one posted before this.
So do what u have to do, or not…
January 31st, 2007 at 4:23 am
Good chapter I enjoyed it… the girl can act!
January 31st, 2007 at 3:49 pm
Well done Jon - these stories are getting better and better!
February 3rd, 2007 at 6:13 am
Hey guys, thanks for the comments. Yeah, I like this story and I’m looking forward to releasing the next chapters.
I’ll have a look at that error Albais!
February 5th, 2007 at 10:28 am
Great turn on this week chapter, and great idea to keep the suspense 2 weeks…
But a mistake again on page 4: 1 text at last vignette is over another so can’t read that last one.
Your turn Jon.
February 5th, 2007 at 5:42 pm
Jon,
Loved it. Just looked at parts 2 and 3 (out today!). Great acting. Would love to see the high quality raw images. Maybe post thumbnails of say 50 pics. Let your subscribers vote on the top 10 and then post those the next update in addition to your normal update.